Bo's paper

The paper I evaluated today was Bo's oil paper. His paper was slightly disorganized and so I told him that he needed to organize it a little better. I told him about his word usage, for example he would use the word worst when he should have used worse. I showed him sentances in the paper that made statements that contradicted other statements that were made in the paper. From this paper learned or at least I realized how important organization in a argument is. If a article that is trying to prove a point is confusing how could the reader take the author side. Disorganization makes the author look like they dont know what they're talking about and therefore the reader will disregard their article and not take them seriously.